FicWad

I had started this story some time ago but stopped reading, just now I have reread and read all that you have posted. It is quite an enjoyable story and I am looking forward to your next update. I love the rivalry between Harry and Neville, the boy-who-lived-but-is-too-lazy-work and the-squib-who-gained-magic. I wonder if Neville will fully realize that Ron is the main reason for the animosity between him and Harry. Ron is such a jealous prat, he hates Harry for befriending Hermione but is too immature to tell her that he is attracted to her himself.

The scene of Harry clawing his way out of the dirt was nicely written but seems to contradict the scene where he is buried in a mausoleum in the Potter's basement. Hmm, I have a feeling that it has something to do with what happened in the cave, perhaps it wasn't really harry's body that was left behind in that cave-storm?

I also like it that you are redeeming the werewolf DEs but also allowing Snape to be his evil self. I wonder how Remus will react to Harry the wolf lord?

It is a great story, but I also feel that I need to register a complaint. You need to improve your grammar a bit. Your use of commas is making some of your sentences very hard to follow and the way you tend to break clauses apart into sentences around the word 'but' distracts the readers from the story. Do you use a beta reader? If not you might want to consider one. They can be very helpful, I know mine is.

BJH