Review for Motorcycle

Motorcycle

(#) jump_jives 2008-10-10

Excellent update and, like the others, I was starting to get concerned that this story had been abandoned. I really enjoy this story and hope to see another update in the near future.

Your writing does seem to be improving as the only issues I immediately noticed were some relatively minor punctuation errors (for example - "Merlin, I’m male. Put something on that shows me some skin and I’m happy") and a couple places where I had take a moment to figure out exactly who was speaking.