Hmm, nearly 100 chapters. Gotta say, I have honestly tried to read this story on and off for the past couple of years. I finally had enough a day or so ago and was determined to give it a damn good try and got a pleasant surprise, once I skipped over the BTVS part it turned into a very VERY good story with some intelligent ideas. I can only assume the reason you have so few reviews is because a lot of people are turned off by self insertions/Mary sues. After reading Fan Fiction for several years I would definitely say that if you did away with the Adam character, who seems to remind me of a cross between Q and Ace Rimmer (what a guy!), This would undoubtedly be one of my all time favourite stories...
Now the rants over =) when are we going to see the ministry punished for stealing Potter booty by the Goblins? c'mon! we wanna see Fudge packing... sent packing I mean. I won't critique your grammar and spelling because I understand you don't have a beta and I'm not anal enough to care. I DID notice though that Fleur had to tell Harry TWICE that her accent was false. I can also tell where you have been influenced by other stories here and there, but that's to be expected really.
Keep up the good work, more Harry less Adam. BTW are you American or English?. Reason I ask is because ... well ... google "Anne Summers" and you'll know what I mean.
Author's response
I am unfortunately well aware how bad the BTVS bit is but at this point it is not really something I can change.
Ace Rimmmer!! I can just about understand Q as regards his powers but Ace Rimmmer of all people, god what on earth did I write to cause that comparison.
As regards Adam's inclusion, I origionally created the Adam character over a decade ago when I was 10 (albeit it in a much more simplistic form) and I wrote this story in order to release my imagination for that character so unfortunately he is rather compulsory to this plot.
Did Harry get told twice by Fleur about her accent where were the two occurrences as I only remember one?
As soon as you asked the question about my nationality I realized what you meant as in America you spell Anne without the 'e' don't you, that didn't occur to me when I named the character, my bad.
Oh and as you probably guest I am English.
Thanks for the review.
GuardianOfLight