Ok, possibly a dumb question here, but what exactly is a beta for? Is it just a proof reader or what? If that's all it is let me know because I'm really good at that kind of thing. I usually proof read my friend's papers and fix sentences for them so stuff sounds better, only problem is I am in the Navy and a single mom to a 9 month old so sometimes I get busy, but for the most part I'm free a lot of the time. If you're interested, email me at email@example.com then delete this if you can because I hate having random people email me.
Great story by the way, looking forward to the next chapter ^_^