Ok, this is a review I use a lot, but... Punctuation and capitalization need some work. Really, a lot more people will read your fic if you put some time into it! If you need some help, there are plenty of people to ask.
Author's response
Well I thank you for your review so I switched from word pad to microsft word witch fixes mistakes this will make it better trust me well please cintinue to read and thanks for the info