I remember this episode...I really liked it...I like your version better! hehehe
I think what I like best about your story in comparison with the show (besides the fact that it's Frank instead of David Duchovny) is the flashbacks - I just absolutely fucking love them. They add this whole other dimension to the story that just seems so essential.
The whole Don thing is really sad ... I appreciated how varied Frank's moods and thoughts were and it was cute that Gerard thought to send Bob and Ray to check on Frank, sweet that he was thinking of him, and even though Frank might not realize it, that little gesture means something! Through his own grief, he was thinking of you Frank!!!!
You need to update pronto!!!
Cheers
Kat