I'm Old Chuck and I'm really old. I get wound up in the writing sometimes and need to read some parts over again. The confusion I find most often is your occasional omission of a word or the introduction of a word that seems not to fit in the sentence.
Your premise is really interesting. It was mind-boggling at first to imagine twins and the telepathic resolution of Hope's blindness.
I hope you haven't given up on the story; it has grown on me and I'm ready for more, please...
Old Chuck