FicWad

I like the premise of the story. However, you're clearly struggling with an unfamiliar mode of speech - many of your usages are odd, to say the least - and there were a number of places where you appeared to have dropped off part of a sentence in your struggle to cope with the language you're trying to use.

Secondly, Harry is doing things with no apparent explanation that directly contradict his earlier knowledge and behaviour. I refer here to Lucius Malfoy. While I'm sure you're going to have Harry leverage his position of power to influence Malfoy, the lack of apparent reason was jarring to say the least.

Thirdly, you consistently get a number of names wrong - especially "Parkingson" (Parkinson). That's just plain rude - or ignorant and lazy, take your pick.

All of which is a pity, as I enjoy stories where Harry takes control of his life.