(#) Afuna 2006-08-22
Again, terrific job with the imagery. Also, good job with the action. I like this one as well and I enjoyed the shift in mood -- it's more dynamic/physical than all the others.
There's so much foreboding just packed into that last line, I swear I can almost hear background music swell up already. Not loud crazy-world-eating-villain way. More of an intense, brooding drumming in the background.
Come to think of it, the beginning also brought to mind drums -- heart-pounding beat, and then a boom, and silence when Shisui reaches the bridge and looks up.
Which is to say, I enjoyed the flow and transitions from one scene/mood to another.
Oh, and one last thing, sorry for the mess I made of your review page. In case you couldn't tell, those last four were all me. Was trying something out and I kept making mistakes with inputting my name sighs