It's a good start and I can't wait to see where you take the story. It's an unusual three people to throw together. A bit of advice: if you knock the rating up to NC-17 you'll get more views and reviews which will help you better your story. On this site people just read smut, rather than good fan fiction. Post it on Fanfiction[dot]net if you want to.
Author's response
Thank you for the review and the advice. I realize that about the rating as well, but since the first chapter didn't have anything worth that rating I didn't want to mislead readers. As the content becomes more mature the rating will increase.
Thank you for the review and the advice. The first chapter was didn't have anything worth a higher rating and I didn't want to mislead readers. However as the content becomes more mature the rating will go up.