I have to be honest that I just dove right into this chapter and read it but not the ones above it. I think you're a great writer from what I've read though. The fact that you mention in the original synopsis that it was inspired by real life it was intrigued me. I do that myself. And I left this review because you asked if anyone out there is interested. I know it's great to get a review now and then to know people are really reading, but hundreds of people read and don't say shit (at least, that's what I've noticed). It's why I started writing "fanfic" originally - to get more "attention" haha. But when it comes down to it, you should write for YOU first. Write to be creative, or for therapy, or for what ever reason YOU want. If people like it, hey, cool. But just know your purpose for writing will always be achieved if you look at it that way.
Author's response
Thanks for the comment and the compliments! ^.^ I realize that I should be writing for myself above all others, and I do, otherwise this, nor anything else I have under different names at different sites around teh web, would be in existance. I suppose I'm more or less curious about whether I should continue this on Ficwad or just keep it to myself from here on out; I know if I allow too much of the plot and story to develope online for free, if I ever want to get this published (and I'm pretty sure I do) that there wouldn't be a market for it, even if it actually does turn out to be a decent shot at a first novel. I'm mostly just asking for any opinions on what people think so far - would anyone want to pay a few bucks to read this?