I will give you my honest opinion, while plot is good, it doesn't click with me, I just started reading it to chapter four and what you did with Susan Bones(One Of My Top Favorite Harry Potter Characters) simply just turned me off of this story.
This is not flame, just only my opinion and my opinion alone.
Good day and good luck.
Author's response
Hello TenshiShouten.
Thanks for expressing your opinion.
I am sorry that the plot direction did nothing for you.
I did not set out to bash any character in particular or specifically Susan.
The muse suggested Susan due to her relationship to Amilea who features in the plot in the future.
I understand where you are coming from and I am sorry if the plot direction offended you.
Thanks for taking the time to share your views.
Regards
Lancelot47