Review for If Wishes Were Hippogriffs

If Wishes Were Hippogriffs

(#) bgoldnyxnet 2009-01-29

Those last two lines are too perfect for words.

And I see you're writing more dialog and action and almost none of the indirect description of the sort I criticized a couple of chapters back. Well done -- either you're getting into the rhythm of the story or you're learning your craft.

(In fact, IIRC I had to go back a couple of more chapters to grab the examples I gave in that review.)

Author's response

Thank you, again, for reading and reviewing. I think I've had more positive reviews on the last two lines of this chapter than in any chapter of any story I've published so far - perhaps I should copywrite that one!
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