Review for Shoki

Shoki

(#) Ithilwen 2005-11-30

Ah, Shoki it to me.

I find it a bit ironic that your spoiler warning contains a spoiler. You might want to look into that.

Clunky in places, but you seem to have a lot of their key phrases down. Anya in particular seems nicely IC.

You repeat yourself a little bit. "Dark look," "large sword" and "folklore" all happen more than once, and that's not good for a 'fic this length. Also, referring to "the brunette" was a bit vague. The word usually refers to a female, so I was wondering whether you meant Anya or someone.

I actually like the idea of Xander as a regular guy with no powers. I find that it highlights his courage. However, this was an interesting take.