(#) brad 2009-04-22
A reasonable Snape this time around? One who might be open to accepting change/improvement in Harry?
Nice to see Luna turn up! She was a bit less 'weird' this time around though. I was pleased that you had her eyeing Ron, since she did seem to have a crush on him in at least OotP.
I was lost with the paragraph starting "And when I lodge my complaint against him ..." and ending with Ron's comment about the Quidditch scores. "new status gives me protection unless I actually do something"?!?!?? notification / reporting quidditch scores?
I liked Harry noticing the more friendly Slytherins; very good. He shouldn't do a Rowling and treat all of that House as bad guys.