Wow, that was unexpected! It is a nice in-depth build up, and different from normal Rydons. (and I don't even read Panic fanfics! It was the featured story today. ^^)
Constructive criticism? I think you over-elaborated in the first bit. There were a few sentences a little too wordy. But it's nice to see people who actually have a wide vocabulary on here these days. =D
Really good story! x
Author's response
Woah, it was featured?! I really need to go on here more often. Lol.
Well, I'm glad you enjoyed this story. And I'll be sure to take your constructive criticism into account. I do tend to get a little wordy. :]
Thank you for the review!