(#) brad 2009-04-29
An excellent start, really dragging us in from the first sentence. I was worried for Ron ... and then I was even more worried for Hermione.
My theory was that Harry had gone back in time to fight and punish the malefactors, but while he might have squeaked clear on that first vow I can't see how he could make the second without actually being innocent. Maybe he used a time turner to repulse the attack but wasn't directly responsible for Malfoy and Goyle. Or maybe he's vocalising a "flash of light spell" when everyone thinks he's making a magical vow?
"I think Ron would rather ache a bit" -- heh!
Gee, Draco's testicles get some rough treatment in your stories, don't they? Starting from A Muggle Summer.
"Siblings and lovers" can do a healing kiss ... so it's not for certain that H/Hr belongs in the latter category yet?
Good luck on your book!