It's a nice setup, though I don't think that Atane would give the body back without teaching Ranma how to get back in the mental place.
Intresting in that it's a dune crossover, just way to short.
Wonders how much forbidden tech the House Ordos has and how much Atane knows of it.
Besides, forbidden by who and why???
Anyway, hope you can get back into it's spirital muse.
(Finaly found a version were I could leave a review)