Review for Dead Roomate

Dead Roomate

(#) Julianne 2009-05-09

Chuckle

Cute. I like it so far, but you might try breaking up the writing a bit more. I love you already for bothering with paragraphs ( :D ), but if you can view the story from a reader's perspective on here, do. Or create an alternate account.

Anyhows, your paragraphs are on separate lines, but not indented... just thought you ought to know.

The only complaint with the writing is the lack of commas when making quotes.