Yeah, your story is great and til about ohhh... say the last 4 paragraphs of the story where Izayoi gets I mean come on rape for an ending. Have someone getting raped in the middle or something, but for the end kill someone off or make it sad or happy ending or whatever, but not rape, unless you continue the story a chapter or two more then its fine...... Still I give the whole story 9.8/10 (the ending could of been better)