I really like this story, but in the one chapter 1 thing sticks out, and if you did it on purpose, oops, sorry. Anyway you put some of the lyrics to 'Sleep' in:
"And I don't feel bad about it. So close you're eyes, kiss me goodbye and sleep."
Well if you didn't do it on purpose, well, they are wrong. He really sings:
'Cause I don't feel bad
So shut your eyes
Kiss me goodbye
And Sleep