I really like this. I hope you carry on. I like the way you aren't all 'he said' / 'she said' and giving names away. A little bit of mystery is good, why should you give everything away?
I hope to see another update soon.
xox.
Author's response
Thanks, glad you like it.
I favor a bit of ambiguity sometimes. In all honesty, this could go in the "original" section, but I don't think a lot of people go over there.