Okay please dont get offended by this at all, its just constructive criticism...
Your story line is a little bland but it's not completely tragic. I think you should reread what you've written so far and find a way to add some substance to it in the future chapters. The dialogues a bit of a downer too. Just try and picture your characters saying what they do in real life..that might give you a better perspective.
Overall, I wouldnt give this story a failing grade. Just try a bit harder with the plot maybe. :D
Happy writing!
Author's response
Thank you so, so much. I mean it. I'm really glad you took the time to do this. Hopefully, I can apply your advice the right way and my story will be better in the future.
-Kelly