I don't want to sound like one of those shallow people who just squeal about how cute something is, but this is REALLY good! Really, really good. I can't think of a single thing to say in critiquing it. Are you a professional? (Cause you should be!) Anyway, I can't stand to see good work without a review, so there you go! I can at least tell you what I liked about it though.
I liked how you tied everything together, it was all very neat and packaged, and every word was in its place. I like the characters, and how real they were. The environment was very realistic, and I like the title (it's a line from one of my favorite songs) Keep writing good stuff! (I saw you had at least one other story, so I am going to go read that now!