You write very well, but, it's not Panic At The Disco. So, I suggest you move this to Cobra Starship before you get bumped off ficwad.
Good story, Good plot, though,
Author's response
Thank you very much, it means a lot. However, there is no Cobra Starship category, and there is a lot of Brendon in it so I figured that Panic was a logical choice. And it will become more Panic as the story continues, don't worry :D Thanks again :D