Unfortunately, I'm not very good at writing poetry, so I don't know how useful my review will be. However, I thought this was really good - there was a strong connection with me. I thought 'salty waterfalls' was particularly strong.
The only improvement I could possibly suggest - and I'm only pointing this out because I know you're supposed to suggest some improvement - is perhaps to avoid clichés.
However, this is a very strong, intense piece of poetry which I thoroughly like. Thank you for sharing!
Tania
Author's response
thank you for reading and reviewing!