I can't say I really buy this chapter, it mostly just did what every other 'bad dumbledore angry harry fic' has done before. Big long rant then 'poof end'. I just can't buy sucide or death like that, in very least he would gone out his way to hurt and kill all his enemies in a blaze of glory. Especialy if Dumbledore had killed all Harry's friends he would want vengence, he cares a lot more for those around him then his own life.. and quietly giving up like that just doesn't seem like Harry in any shape or form.
Say he's not that smart.. yet he knew parsel magic, uncovered all those plots even strong wandless magic. This isn't canon harry and thus isn't that dumb to go 'boo hoo dead'. Honestly this harry achieved nothing, he whined like a little brat killed only Snape, and that was by acident and basicaly left for dumbledore to oblivate or kill the witness's. Killing off whole great hall by a 'sudden death eater attack' wouldn't faze him, he achieved nothing and died stupidily and I just can't buy that.
The first half the fic wasn't to bad, but then again it wasn't anything had not heard a million times before and the end was so unsatisfying and illogical that over all this whole plot bunny seemed like a bust to me.
Author's response
Yeah, that was the weak part of this story. I've gotten more than a couple of reviews along those lines...mostly because of the long monologue.
The idea I was trying to impart here, is that Harry has had far too much...not unlike his tantrum in Dumbledore's office. How much can one person be expected to absorb before he breaks?
Here, Harry knows that Dumbledore is a worse enemy than Voldemort. He knows that in one way or another, Dumbledore is behind every misfortune in his life, and when his love is murdered, apparently at the behest of the old bastard, he simply says F**k It!
He understands that Dumbledore created Voldemort, to defeat Grindelwald and is counting on Harry to destroy his mistake.
~~...and quietly giving up like that just doesn't seem like Harry in any shape or form.~~
But that's exactly what he did in DH.
The Parselmagic is not Parselmagic. He simply spoke the spell in Parseltongue, which he 'does' understand. The secret here, is nobody else speaks it, and so, it would be next to impossible to break without knowing what was cast. Even an approximation wouldn't be sufficient to undo the spell. It's like a one-shot notebook code.
It wouldn't have been difficult for even a mediocre student to add what is known about all his friends dying, together to find a common thread, and in canon, while Harry is trusting, he's not overly so. He does tend to try to investigate things he doesn't understand. What better thing than the murder of your lover? All it would take is a few questions. While Dumbledore would know how to cover his tracks, I'd suspect Snape would make it known that he was involved, just to torment Harry. (That 'is' canon.)
The wandless magic was a desperate bid for freedom. He pushed all his magic into that spell in order to escape.
Dumbledore wouldn't dare. First, there are several hundred students to deal with. Far too many to explain away. Second he never does things by himself. He always uses proxies, so as to keep his hands looking clean. Third, there are at least a dozen angry teachers, who would prevent such an atrocity with 'extreme prejudice'.
Harry actually did achieve something with his death. Being as both he and the 'Emergency-Reserve BWL' are both dead, the wizards will have to get together in order to eliminate Voldemort, if they want to survive.
Basically he's saying: "You created this mad-dog, you shoot him!"
I guess I got pretty preachy there, but then this was one of my more angsty stories.
~~it wasn't anything had not heard a million times before~~
As my dad once told me, Nothing new under the sun. Everything we do is simply a refinement of something someone else did.
Alorkin