(#) BenRG 2009-11-02
Several interesting parts to this, one of my favorite of your WIPs.
Firstly, I do like how you portray Tony Stark the father. Tony is wonderfully involved with Harry's life and you still manage to keep the character true to how he appears in his various canon incarnations. He is a playboy, a technical whizz-kid but he has a tremendoes reserve of decency.
Secondly, I love how you handled Harry's crush. I was wondering exactly what you would do when you said, when starting this story, that Julie Power was going to be Harry's initial love interest. Having her older than Harry and wonderfully unaware of him except as one of Jack's crazy friends is a great and unexpected touch. Well done for doing something so different.
What is intreguing is all the things now happening in the background. It appears that there are several people who have a use for Harry, beyond Dumbledore and his ridiculous attempt to avoid responsibility for dealing with Voldemort. We can see several possible girlfriends (some willing, some clearly under orders) and we can also see some mystery players.
Overall, this remains an excellent work and I'm looking forward to seeing more.
BenRG's Rating: 8/10