Nice story line. I remember another Gabrielle bond story that wound up with them in bed shortly after the 2nd task, and from memory it leaped into sex (I think she showed up in his bed naked). I'm happy this one has not, that there is room for 'mere' closeness in a Veela relationship.
But the writing is a bit slim on the details that could provide richness and interest. For example, Dumbles apparating in to kidnap Harry could have been a scene rather than merely one line. Elsewhere, dialog seemed pretty short.
Other lacking detail: how the heck did the basilisk get divided up? What possible claim does anyone have, except Harry who killed it? Right of conquest and all that. In fact, he should have all of it plus a reward for killing a murderous creature on a rampage. If you don't buy that, and think Hogwarts should get a portion ... then how does the Beauxbatons potion master get anything?
I'm disappointed in Harry's calmness throughout. For example, not protesting the original points and detention more. Then in the meeting where he learns of the bond, he should be arguing once again for points to be restored and an apology or something ... he didn't even try to get out of remaining detention! Harry comes across as just plain passive.
In the concluding sequence, he is even passive at getting out of Vernon's car with no explanation, just a week or two after a bunch of death eaters tried to kill him. What does he think is going on here? The only indication here is that his uncle has sold him or been bribed to hand him over, and he doesn't generate any suspicion at all that he might be in danger? Doesn't draw or even locate his wand to ensure it is readily available? He just wishes he knew what was going on.
Was Pettigrew questioned? Was Sirius tried for the first time, and maybe acquitted?
So, lots of holes.
But the story line so far is interesting, and I'm looking forward to seeing where it goes.
Thanks for writing.