Ha, your adding comedy! It's great. I love the all the deatail in your story. I've read fanfictions, with more detail, and length, ect... But the way you write is so minimal and short, yet its really effective.
I know what I mean... :)
To put it simply, its one of the best fics I've read in a while. As I've said before; I like to get my point across!
I really can't wait to see how it progress'.
Author's response
Thank you for the review!
I suppose I am adding a little bit of comedy, I think most of it will come from Bob and Frank, just because they seem the funniest out of MCR, not that the rest aren't.
And thank you for the comment about the detail, I try adding detail in but it seems to start droning on when I do so I keep it short.
Its weird to think that people like my story so much, to me it's not that good, maybe because I've written it myself , I have no idea.
I'm writing a new chapter now! While doing my h/wk, so it may take a longer time than before.
Thanks again,
Lu