Poor Alyn. Even though it's Gerard you made him sound so repulsive! Well done!!
If she didn't think she had any hope, she would not play the game right. She would quit trying, like all the others. So! Does this mean that all of this 'you're so different' is just an act he uses on all the girls to see if they will fall in love with him? What IS the game exactly, and how do you win?
He felt her mouth quiver, He told himself that she was doing it because she wanted him...what he had always wanted, A girl screaming for him, no one else. Even though Gerard's a serial killer, and i wouldn't actually be saying this if he character was real - i do feel a tad sorry for him. It seems like rejection and the need to feel loved triggered him. He has one dark mind though, i will give him that! But he is so desperate for Alyn to want him, its pretty sad. He's obviously been pretty damaged; im guessing it stems not oly from the first girl he killed, but what happened at home! [Did Mikey not know about this??]
Excellent, more soon!
Author's response
I know! It's almost like you can't help but feel sorry! I plan to put more on how his.. mind, got the way it is, into the story.