So, don't tell me you're completly new with writing because your story does not give that impression. It's written well and I'm not just talking about the ideas characters and the storyline. The way you write the scene, their conversations and action, all written pretty well. And Gerard's past wasn't horrendous to read believe me:P You didn't go into too much detial and didn't make it boring at all, believe me some people stretch it soooo far and insert pointless information. Like I get bored with stories very easy and I need to get sucked into a story very fast else I won't bother reading another chapter. How did you get this idea btw because not many normal girls think: HEY SERIAL KILLER COOLI, they exist though, I'm member of tbp.net and on there I met a lot of girls just as crazy about serial killers as I am. I am a very peacefull person other then that:P
owh and please, PLEASE don't thin: fuck it I'll get them preg and married. don't ruin this pretty thing you have, because you really created some fucked up situation and this is SO MUCH better to read then a girl having a crush on Gerard Way. Please PLEASE don't score any Mary-Sue points or make Gerard seem too much of a decent guy. Or make him act like an angel while he like kills kitties or something, I love the psycho-factory he has over him!
And I agree, if you skip in months... I dunno I like to be on first row from day to day. Little drabble about me, I wrote/write about Gerard as a serial killer too. well it's one of my stories. And I can say I regretted skipping through days because it's so fucking interesting to share the emotional and phisical pain with readers. I dunno human nature/instinct just fasinates me and I really loved writing in a victims POV and one of a person that's pretty soulless. So, don't wanna nag or sound been there done that, but skipping months will make you feel sad after a while. If you keep it in days you'll stay 'in the moment' and i like those details, the feeling of hopelessness endless ect.
owh btw, my curious will kill me one day, but have to written other stories and how did you started writing, I always wonder how that whole writing-trip worked with other people.
Author's response
Yes This is my very first story I have ever written. Wow thanks! I always wanted to write, and I am so extremely interested in Psychology, which are my two majors, so I just combined them. Yea I went to the police stuff today because I am a bit in a pickle with the Alyn Gerard thing, I know the Pregnancy was a good twist but I dont want them in anyway to be this "one big happy family" shit. I want it still cold hard and real serial killer in the end of all this. so idk if ima Kill alyn or not, so im having trouble with that. I want her not to like Fall in love with him, but just think she is, sort of. Because of her obsession over the years it is turning her head into all these confused feelings.
Also. I added you on twitter, if your name is still the same as ur ficwad name i added you. Mines ChemCollette.
I want Gerard to have his "moments" of wanting that attention, but I do not want to stray away from what he was in the beginning of the story. Really? I will have to go to that site then, because it sounds like my kinda people.
Yea I am so interested in serial killers and stuff, my major is psychology in law, to study and work on the criminally insane. idk I have all these thoughts in my head so I have to like put them all on paper/ text, so that I can let it out haha, I have written before but I never showed any body my work, this is sort of a new thing, and it is weird to have so much praise for a piece of imagination ya know?
I love the long replies I like when people give good hard thought into what they read. And I like replying, because I like talking about this stuff, so thanks!