So this is good! :] You should definitely continue this asap. I'm wondering what's going to happen next and I can't wait!
Author's response
Thank you!! I have about half of the second chapter written so far.
I have posted the short story to it, if you want to read that. It may be a bit of a spoiler to what goes on in the Extended one though. And apparently it is similar to some movie or something.
I swear I didn't know. I wrote the short story for my Short Story class in school, and I had about 3 people tell me it sounded like some movie I had never even heard of.
But thank you very much for your review. I wouldn't mind consructive critisism either ^^ People say I write very well, but never tell me what I can do to improve. I know I am not perfect lol