The story over all is good. The flow is a little off at times though and the all the "!" are a little distracting. I've never read a fan fiction with a emotional HP its an interesting change. However I do think Harry shouting I love you so soon was a bit off. Seeing how he seemed to be a little wary of people after his friends turned on him. I have a question though: Were they making out while covered in blood and guts,etc?