good work mate, and i commend you on your use of other language, spot on.
with that said, wtf mate, i don't read spanish nor any other language you used. it totally screwed up the continutity.
sure have your way and show off with your foreign language and all that but please don't stick the translation down at the freaking bottom, have them next to the freaking sentence as i'm a lazy reader like every one else.
with this raping bs c'mon harry says he wont stand for that crap but he wont let vernon rot in prison? i mean WTF. burn the fucker already.
i enjoyed the other parts of your story like getting the magicals fit and moving.
with albus getting disarmed does that mean the elder wand now recognizes him as his master?
Author's response
Thanks on the commendation.
I also agree.l I should have made some mark on the Spanish sentences or written them in Parentheses, or alerted you lot to their presence. Brain fart here. Sorry.
The only reason I re-mentioned the rapes, is because i wanted Petunia to understand just how deep in shit she was. While burning Vernon, is satisfying, it's over too quickly. If Vernon were to remain in prison he'd be dead within a few days. A rapist is the second lowest form of prisoner, the lowest is a child molester. Prisoners have kids too.
Remember, Harry want's Vernon to SUFFER! So he's set him up in a manner that won't physically harm him, but will hurt him greatly.
Glad you like the rest. Having been a cop, a SEAL and worked with the Marine Corps, I can assure you Physical fitness is one of the most important aspects of readiness. Harry and his Jedi, are going to go into battle and they'll need every advantage they can get. That is one that they can get cheaply.
The elder wand...will NOT be playing a part in this fic. I thought the Hallows was a particularly stupid plot device and so, none of my stories will include them. His wand is just a wand.
Alorkin