“Uw huisaelf kunnen mijn goederen aan veiligheid nemen” i just saw this and as a dutchspeaker myself, i couldn't ignore this. change it to: "Uw huiself mag mijn goederen in veiligheid brengen." that's a lot better. (this is in chapter 18).
haven't read the rest yet, but after my exam tomorrow i'll be eager to continue!
keep on writing!
Author's response
Thanks for the correction. I've edited it in.
Good luck on your exams.
Alorkin