FicWad

I love the story idea, it is nice to see Neville as the important and confident one, however, I am a little concerned with the maturity of the characters. They don't act 11 especially at the beginning where Harry goes from scared overwhelmed new student to confident, knowledgeable foil for Malfoy. Neville certainly has an excuse but you would think that people would notice more than they do. He knows far more than the average pureblood student would need to know. As I said it is a good idea that breaks away from tired FanFiction plot-lines only to fall back in to them immediately, though, honestly it would be hard to avoid them. One thing that came to mind as I was reading this is that if Neville and Harry's roles were switched what if there parents roles were switched as well. What if Lily and James were tortured into insanity and Harry was sent to the Dursley's. So that Harry would grow up the same as in cannon, but since Malfoy didn't make a nuisance of himself Harry had no bias against Slytherin and was sorted there. Thus Harry may not have been Neville's friend in the other timeline, he may have even joined Voldemort. Imagine Neville's reaction to learing that not only is he no longer the BWL but that the villain Harry Potter is. He would feel that the world was doomed and it would put an interesting spin on things. Anyway it is something to think about if you write the story again.

Herald