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Dark Times Call for Dark Measures
Dark Times Call for Dark Measures
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Saicha6744
2010-11-08
Man's voice = male voice.
You used paragraphs, that made reading easier. Try to make your paragraphs shorter. The long ones are hard to read.
Lilith's character seems to develop slowly, but nicely.