Holy Shit, wow dude.
That last part my heart started pounding so hard I could feel it in my neck and my hands were shaking, that has NEVER happened to me before. Not in roller coasters, paintball, terrifying nightmares, never. I'm not even sure what it was, it certainly didn't seem that special, but damn. I just don't know, kick ass regardless.
Author's response
Wow! Didn't know I should have put a medical warning in the disclaimer! Thanks for the praise and I am glad you hold such a high opinion of my writing. - Jim