I think that the pace and setting of the story is well thought out. I am also willing to offer assistance for proof-reading to assist with spelling and grammar. I have so far enjoyed the story and hope to see future chapters for it. I only wish that I was half as good as you are, but i think my mind was built more for complex computers than beautifully written story. Cheers Mate.
Author's response
Thank you for your comments, but don't put yourself down. I am not a writter I am just doing this for fun.
Anyway I am always up for the offer of help so drop me a mail.
easysurfing@hotmail.com
and we see what we can work out between ourselves.
Cheers
Easysurfing