(#) Rous 2006-09-23
This makes no sense whatsoever. You have written a few lines and now try to pass them off as a story? That is such bad karma. You have said nothing to justify the title. This would not even make a good drabble; it is too short. You would need six more words. At least. Have you ever read anyone else's work? Have you considered what goes into a story before someone posts it?
You seem to want to write, and you want others' approval, but you must earn it. You do not get it by virtue that you desire it. People are fickle. You either need to fufill their needs, or make them fulfill yours. You have done neither.