I love the premise, and the characterization is very interesting. however, I have to take issue with your narrative style. You "tell" us a lot of things, but "show" very little. Try explaining less and describing a little more.
Author\'s Response: Yeah, I don't claim that this is my best work. Songfics just don't seem to be my forte. I actually only wrote this fanfic for a contest on the Sonic Zone Forums. The theme was music, which left a songfic as the only option I could think of. Still, your review was most appreciated.