That was awesome! I loved the action and suspense, and your depictions of the different species. I wonder what other kinds of monsters and demons you can conjure up. ;)
Also, it's nice to see the succubus/incubus in a different light, more like that of a victim. Before this I always heard the myth of them being dangerous demons, and I like the way you depicted them in this story.
So yea, it was awesome, and cool, and I love it, and I'm going to shut up now because I'm oozing over this right now. (^.~)-b