Hey there,
You were right. There are cliches and CLICHES, but I enjoyed yours so far.
You gave a very good insight into Gabrielle, Harry and Hermione in the first two chapters, Gabrielle being the most detailed and processed to perfection.
Veela are mostly, especially by most writers on this archive, depicted as material for some quality smut, and I applaud you for having chosen a different path. I always felt Veela must be much more than that.
I only hope you won't turn your story into some Super!Harry or Godly!Harry horror; he's just a young man with his pluses and minuses, leave him at that! Grant him some happiness!
I will most definitely be following up on your coming chapters. In the meantime, please allow me some shameless self-plug and suggest you to read my own Harry/Fleur story titled "I remember", which I - due to the specifics of this site - have uploaded elsewhere? This is my own take on Veela and I would be really curios to hear your thoughts.
http://www.harrypotterfanfiction.com/viewstory.php?psid=280270
Happy writing,
Zoltan
datbenik513
Author's response
Thanks!
Yep, that's what I've noticed with Veela in most fics. There'll eventually be some sex, but, that won't be for many chapters, and instead develop naturally from their relationships.
Won't be a Super! Harry. Harry WILL be powerful, but it will take him sometime to gain control over it, and use it, but overall he'll be on par with Voldie/DumbledorewithElderwand, perhaps with a little more raw power, but less knowledge.
Thanks for the plug, I'll definitely check out your story when I get some reading time.