Review for JEDI POTTER


(#) Wonderbee31 2011-04-19

Hmm, I can see why Harry is wanting to promote Ron, but right now, he's in the wrong, and you've got me wondering if it's going to come back and bite Harry when Ron gets someone, or ends up killing someone in a fit of rage? Ron is leaning more towards the Sith imo, and Harry'd have been better off tanking him, though I wonder, are you planning to kill Luna off, or have her kill Ron, cause I can see that scenario very easily in this instance. Good idea to see Augusta using some sense here, and Snape, the worm who's more wormy than wormtail, the bravest man Harry ever knew...sorry, LOL, can't say that without giggling, honestly, did JKR fall in love so much with her character, or is she more like the other fangirls and fall in love with Alan Rickman's portrayal of him? The guy here is the ultimate twisted person, maybe more than Tom, as I don't feel any pity for what might happen to him at all, though Albus, it seems to me that Harry's plan is getting more convoluted around him, and making me wonder why he doesn't just cut his limbs off and break the Elder Wand in front of him? Oh wel, looking forward to what happens at the big battle next time and who will be and won't be walking away.

Author's response

Heya Wonderbee!

The decision I made regarding Ron, was quite possibly the hardest decision I've had to make in this entire story...and it was made a long time ago.

Ron is at risk, but not of going Sith, but he's still dangerous to his friends. Here, 've made him a better man than in canon (and most fanon, I might add) with his heart where it should be, but he's also immature, jealous, and easily controlled by his emotions. He earned the promotion, by learning the skills needed, but he hasn't truly mastered them. This is going to cost him.

Harry: Harry is still a teenager. Ron is his first friend, and while he is far more mature than his peers, he is still, in many ways, that scared, psychologically damaged little kid in the cupboard under the stairs.

The problem here, is that when it comes to Ron, he's thinking with his heart. He wants to keep his first friend and knows that if he orders Ron to stay behind he'll lose that friendship. He's going to have to make a very hard decision and when he does, it's gonna hurt.

He'll announce that decision soon, but he won't be naming the contestants until just before the battle.

Luna can take care of her self, (and I like her too much to hurt her.)

Augusta: I've always seen her as a staid, and tradition-bound woman with a hint of bigotry, and somewhat less love for Neville than I think proper, but otherwise good. Also, she's been a staunch supporter of Harry and his plan since July, even knowing it would mean the end of the social system she grew up with. It takes a lot of conviction to raze a system to the ground and build up another one that doesn't particularly benefit the architects.

~the bravest man Harry ever knew...~

Giggling was not my response. I believe I said: "My Ass!"

Snape was a bigot, a bully and most likely, a double agent. I explained it in an earlier review, but I'll say it again. If he was spying on Voldemort, and Dumbledore outed him in court, why was he not killed? Karkaroff was hunted down and killed for failing to show up when he was called.

Alan Rickman is an excellent actor, and an attractive man, but really, Snape is nothing like him. Unfortunately almost all the 'Good /misunderstood/reformed Snape' stories are written by thirteen year old fangirls!

That's not to say there are not a few very good ones out there. (Hindsight by Loralee and 'To Shape and Change' by Blueowl are two of them.

IMO, Snape is a bastard who never learned. His downfall will be particularly appropriate. (and it's been written for months.)

This is sixth year AU. Neither the Hallows nor the Horcuxes are part of this story. I thought they were both badly used plot devices. While there was some set up for the Horcruxes, specifically Harry's cloak, the entire thing was dropped on us like a huge Mary-Sue from the sky.

A couple of my stories will incorporate the Horcruxes because they can be made to work, but I will never use the Hallows!

Albus: Harry's plan is complete. He didn't just want to stop Dumbledore. He wanted to destroy him. He wanted to remove everything that made the man who'd done so much damage to him personally and to Britain as a whole, who he was. By his actions, he's taken Dumbley's fortunes, his titles and positions, his support, his authority, and his school. Now he's going to take his magic. (chapter after next.)

All it will take, is the activator and Dumbley will provide the opportunity to do that. As for cutting off limbs...funny you should mention that...

Hope you enjoy the next chapter.