The Ieros are witches? Now THAT'S original. The writing was good in this chapter, well done. But remember, when a new speaker talks the dialogue starts on a new line. Some of Frank and his mum's speech runs on the same line and it's quite confusing to make out who's saying what. But this is really interesting!
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Sorry I guess I forgot to add the spaces. I write these on paper then type them up and post. When I write, I put little marks then forget to make them on the computer.....