Man my eyes sting. I read all of these chapter up to this in two days on my phone. If I go blind I am blaming you! Anywho it is 4:41 in New Jersey and I have to be up at 9 tomorrow.... worth it!
okay now on to some actual reviewing. I really like the way that you make everyone talk how they should. Gerard says ain't and slang a lot, not to mention fuck. Jacob, Anna, and Claire who where all raised together speak the same. I can tell without reading who said what without looking because of what they said, which shows an amazing writing ability! When Claire and Anna said there first curses I was just as shocked as them. Plus I don't know how the hell you can write do not like that all the time. That shit would drive me crazy! I love my contraction!
I love these types of fan fiction. I hate short ones, a lot of these stories have good idea's, but most of them seem to rush the story to please readers to much. I mean you did try and turn the story into something lame by making Gerard fall in love with her, with no questions ask, you had them develop a true relationship. I can always tell when I am reading a great story if I have a dream about it. I had one about Anna being a Soiled Dove and Jacob saving her (I had some others, but I am pretty sure it had something to do with all those x warnings too ^_^). Sorry I didn't review every chapter, I just didn't want to stop reading, but now, my ass is almost to the end of the already updated chapters. I know I am going to be pulling my hair out until you update every damn time.
I hope some of that made sense.
Oh and if you couldn't tell from that review I love to ramble on and on.... and on.