This was well-written and the line spacing is so much easier to read. Well done! Now go back and change the rest of your chapters to follow the same way.
This chapter was good, I liked the interplay between Gerard and Frank. Make sure you don't take things too quickly with them, it's always very unrealistic when they've just met one day and the next moment they're making out. Also you're kind of doing the whole listing thing again. Becareful with that, try and make it read more smoothly. But you're getting the whole awkward shy gay thing across very nicely, I like that.
All in all, very nice work. Good chapter!
Author's response
Thank you. Let me first say you are amazing. Most people would hate someone correcting them all the time but for me it helps. I will be updating the other chapters when I next update which should be up later today. Please keep on reviewing because your review really help me. :)