Yet again, you seem to have a thing about not using full stops. It's really weird.
I'm not listing all of the mistakes you made. I can't really be bothered. Also, isn't it a bit early for Gerard to be killing himself? Sounds like an emo, to me.
Author's response
actually you are bein rude and so what if gee is an emo , i am an emo so why dont you go and read a fanfic thats perfect oh wait there is no perfect fanfic so just leave.......!