So you have Harry beaten in your story. In fact it seems that Tonks and the Weasley's claim things being cruel and odd about Harry's treatment but never discussed it with him or anyone till he was on his death bed. Of course the Twins crack some jokes and Hermione..giggles at Snape being knocked out after seeing and critizing Harry.
I really hope this is the worse your fanfic has....I tend to just quit a story if the beginning has little sense.
Author's response
Hello, GenoMerc.
Dumbledore placed Harry with the Dursleys with the specific intention of beating the spirit out of him. Any time someone mentioned it, he'd give them the same platitude he give about Snape, or he'd describe harry as being an unruly child prone to getting into scraps with his friends. He'd also Obliviate whoever presses the issue.
Harry also actively kept people from knowing his condition. Look at Canon. There is anecdotal evidence throughout canon of the neglect and abuse he lived under, including three attempts at murder by his relatives, and yet, harry refuses to discuss his life with anyone. The only time he did, was on the first train ride where Ron was whinging about having to wear hand-me down clothing and he told Rn about his rearage. After that with one or two exceptions, he was completely closed mouthed.
Twins: Even in the face of disaster, the twins crack jokes. that is canon.
I'd have laughed my ass off seeing Snape knocked out like that, but for Hermione, she was in shock at Harry's condition and more than a little hysterical. People in that condition do things they normally wouldn't.
Snape wasn't criticizing harry. He was being his usual assholish self, while Harry lay dying of injuries he was aware had been inflicted.
I started the story on a harsh note because I wanted to grab the reader's attention.
It will have over four hundred thousand words by the time it's finished. If you tend to quit a story that easily you might want to look for another one.
Alorkin